Sunday, July 31, 2011

TILL THE END/ Poetry Potluck #46


"LOVE...and it's not being there"...The topic for this week's POETRY POTLUCK #46. 


TILL THE END

I remember when silk was creamy white,
pulled in at my waist
and a train followed me down the aisle.

I stepped on petals crimson and pink,
my posies fluttered
with nerves of their own,
leaves shaking,

a forecast of a roving storm,
as I walked within a promise
before I swore to love till the end.

The end slid into view
around the corner,
sun dropping below the horizon,
voices shrill, exploding within walls.
Put a lid on!

I slipped down the steps
of my dream house,
out the door,
past honor and obey.

Locked it up,
tossed the key over my shoulder
like a bridal bouquet.
Catch it if you will.


copyright/ all rights reserved/ 2011


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20 comments:

Jessica Prescott said...

Something about this piece, I'm not sure what exactly, I really enjoyed, especially the last stanza.

Jingle said...

lingering ending,

very enjoyable piece, the imagery is outstanding.

Thanks for sharing.

lunawitch15 said...

there seems to be no emotion here. like she is numb to the whole facts of it. really intriguing.

Bryce Daniels said...

"past honor and obey."

Loved that take on the subject matter.

The enjambment on this piece is VERY good, Lyn.

Enjoyed it immensely!

Lyn said...

Hi Jessica-
So glad you did enjoy this portrait of love and loss...thanks!

Lyn said...

Hi Jingle-
The ending..perhaps a new beginning...Thanks for your comment!

Lyn said...

Hi lunawitch15-
Interesting comment..maybe she's turned into a cynical reporter, although she's full of girlish ideals at the beginning...

Lyn said...

Hi Bryce-
"Enjambment" sent me to the dictionary. I did that? Thanks! So glad that you commented...

Kay said...

Oh, what imagery! I could see it like a movie being played before my eyes.

Lyn said...

Hi Kay-
Very interesting...because I fancy that everything I write is a little movie..I once wrote a dozen 1 minute plays for an assignment..parodies of course..hmmm, where are they??

Natalie said...

Beautiful and emotive.

Lyn said...

Hi Natalie-
So good to see you again..thanks for the lovely words...

wolfsrosebud said...

Hope fading away...

booguloo said...

Hate when that happens. What we say can have a powerful impact.

Lyn said...

Hi wolfsrosebud-
But to be reclaimed somewhere else, perhaps..thank you for your visit!

Lyn said...

Hi booguloo-
We can't always get what we want...but if we try, try, try...well, you know! Thanks!

Margie said...

So enjoyed this, Lyn.
Great imagery!
Nicely done!

Shashi said...

Its an intriguing and very interesting verse... I like what Luna said too..
Thanks for sharing..


Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2010/05/whispers.html

Lyn said...

Hi Margie-
Always lovely to hear from you..you're so encouraging!

Lyn said...

Hi Shashi-
Glad you enjoyed this..actually this was as emotive as I get..sentimentality gives me the heebee jeebees!!
Om Namah Shivaya...

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