Monday, September 19, 2011

MAGPIE/ Prompt #83


THE SNAKE CHARMER/  Henri Rousseau. 1907



WHAT A CHARMING Painting...Magpie/ Prompt #83, thanks for the inspiration, Tess!



THE EDEN CHRONICLES

No shadow under you,
no mirror image of your outline,
red eyes Morse code a warning
that seems an enticement,
an enticement that seems a warning.

Prickles on my neck
as you slither by
to the purr of the clarion.

Belly scraping rock bottom,
barnacles, scum,
a piquant soup.

The sinister hand stirs, beckons,
a whisper hisses in passing...
"She's to blame,
herewith in mud forever"...



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35 comments:

Tess Kincaid said...

I love the notion of eyes Morse coding! Nice, Lyn.

Hartley said...

Oh man, this one really hits ya on the second read. Yep, blame the female, again, she's the downfall of the universe. Another beauty, Ms. Poetess!

Lyn said...

Hi Tess-
So glad you enjoyed this..couldn't wait to jump right in!!

Lyn said...

Hi Hartley-
Just blown away by your comment..thank you so much!!

Blue Sky Dreaming said...

The whole piece sings...or hisses! Love it all!

Sean Vessey said...

Why does no one blame the snake?
I loved your poem. It made me think and smile.

Helen said...

I gave it the good old college try ... choosing which stanza was my favorite. No contest, they were all great!

120 Socks said...

Yes, yes, love this one - captures the pure essense of the prompt.

thingy said...

That last line is chilling. Great write, Lyn.

Brian Miller said...

smiles. we all look for someone to blame...to take responsibility from our hands for our choices...whetherit be the opposite gender or a hapless snakewho happens to be slithering by...

Laurie Kolp said...

Ahh... this begs for rereading. I love it... especially the 2nd and 3rd stanzas.

Lyn said...

Hi Blue Sky..
I like that it hisses..thank you!!

Lyn said...

Hi Sean-
I like the effect this had on you...smiling and thinking!! thanks...

Lyn said...

Hi Helen-
I deeply appreciate your comment..thanks so much...

Lyn said...

Hi 120 Socks-
When I looked at this painting..so much was hidden..and then revealed..but that's poetry for you! Thank you...

Lyn said...

Hi thingy-
I think the last line is history..enjoyed your comment..thanks!

Lyn said...

Hi Brian-
It's fun to blame myth, to share the world with snakes..It's necessary not to let the snakes have all the fun though...thank you, always...

Lyn said...

Hi Laurie-
So pleased that you like this..I really sort of "caught" it!! Thanks...

Kay L. Davies said...

Wonderfully well done, Lyn.
— K

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

Lyn said...

Hi Kay-
Thank you so much..I appreciate your kind words..

Erratic Thoughts said...

Alluring words!
I read it again for the sheer joy to enjoy the weave of wordplay:)

Isabel Doyle said...

I bet it's all lies, it was Adam that put her up to it, she simply wanted to change the subject from endless discussions about gardening ...

fine conjuring Lyn

Lyn said...

Hi Erratic Thoughts-
Lovely thing to say..I thank you!

Lyn said...

Hi Isabel-
Love your imagination, and your scenario...thank you!

Trellissimo said...

It sure repays a second and third read. Very good Magpie.

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Great write Lyn

Anna o]

Doctor FTSE said...

The red eyes morse coding is a lovely image.

Lyn said...

Hi Trellissimo-
I'm flattered to hear that..thank you so much!!

Lyn said...

Hi hyperCRYPTICal-
Thank you Anna, very nice!!

Lyn said...

Hi Doctor FTSE-
I'm sort of glad that this phrase came up for me...thank you...

The Cello Strings said...

fantastic flow.
your words are tasty,
they make readers want for more.

Lyn said...

Hi Cello Strings-
Very nice to hear from you...lovely comment..thanks!!

Steve Finnell said...

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Lyn said...

Hi Steve-
Thank you so much!

Nicholas V. said...

I resisted much the reference to Eden! You make it work very nicely. Lovely poem.

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