Sunday, March 24, 2013

MAGPIE...Prompt #161


                                          Not to be Reproduced, 1937/ Rene Magritte


THANK YOU, Tess at MAGPIE TALES...


TO PLAY

The part you played,
the glide towards dawn,
a wild card, face down,
every hair in place.

All the unknowns of you
take the shape of smoke.
What's in your memory
that you want to mask?

My pool of tears,
they dry to flakes.
Yet the pathway is still
a mesmeric zigzag.

Winning, losing,
every dream
takes a bite out of me.

Your image is all you risk.
I'll call you,
don't call me.


Copyright/ all rights reserved/ 2013

            Hoppy Birday to me!!!  3/22...Aries, what else?

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23 comments:

Gerry@ Strummed Words said...

Sensitive yet probing. Nice one!

Helen said...

Love the twist in your last two lines!

Lyn said...

Hi Gerry-
I liked that one could really dive into this one!! Thanks...

Lyn said...

Hi Helen-
Reminded me of my ex! hmmm...thanks!

Kathe W. said...

love the ending! I have said those very words!

Lyn said...

Hi Kathe W-
I think we're legion! Thank you so much!

izzy said...

Unknowns and smoke are problematic!
thanks-

Lyn said...

Hi izzy-
Good comment..thank you!

Helena said...

Pleasantly penned. I love the thought of those flaky tears!

Tumblewords: said...

Yes. Of course. :)A great read!

~T~ said...

A "mesmeric zigzag" of a poem. Well done!

Dave King said...

What an original response to the prompt! A great read.

Brian Miller said...

nice...love the takes a bite out of me..acknowledges how the unwillingness to share affects all those around...the unwillingness to let anyone in....

Lyn said...

Hi Helena-
Thanks so much for your insight!

Lyn said...

Hi Tumblewords-
"Great" is good!! Thank you so much...

Lyn said...

Hi ~T~
Thank you..it was interesting to do!

Lyn said...

Hi Dave-
Love your comment (of course!)..thanks so much...

Lyn said...

Hi Brian-
Sometimes when I write I need others to show me what I've written...thanks!

Sue said...

I like this line best of all...

Your image is all you risk.

=)

Kutamun said...

Hi Lyn , very enchanting , Quixotic . Happy birthday , ! Im a cold calculating libran

Lyn said...

Hi Sue-
Thanks for your comment..I like your choice!!

Lyn said...

Hi Kutamun-
Thank you...Libra/ Aries, a very good balance!!

Little Nell said...

All smoke and mirrors to protect the image - very clever!

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