Wednesday, September 18, 2013

MAGPIE...Prompt #186



THANK YOU, Tess..for Magpie Tales...


ON THE MAP

You put me on the map
so to speak,

so good at sketching other's lives.

Lover, friend,
life partner,
I'm up to date.

Gave me form and figure,
colored me in with Crayolas,
but you went over the line,
let me bleed
into undisclosed territory.

Lucky me,
critics always ready to comment
with a saving grace.

Many salvaged me,
made me fit their hindsight.

I became a double doppelganger,
mirrors reflected an eternity of me,

but every karmic comeback
left room to be desired.
Still a babe
knocking at the door.

Just let me in.


Copyright/ All rights reserved/ 2013

http://www.minblu.blogspot.com

http://twitter.com/lyxny

15 comments:

Karen S. said...

Yes please somebody open the door, let her in. Right now, there are a tremendous amount of visions dancing through my thoughts, mapping my way. Ah yes, this is quite clever.

Jerry E Beuterbaugh said...

Incredible imagery on a number of levels!

Kutamun said...

Say Hello to HAL and Dave for me, and thanks for the trip across the abyss !

Lyn said...

Hi Karen S.-
Thanks so much for your encouraging words!

Lyn said...

Hi Jerry-
Thank you..so glad to hear from you!

Lyn said...

Hi Kutamun-
Right back at you! Leave it to HAL and Dave..all aboard..thanks!

Other Mary said...

Love this:

"Gave me form and figure,
colored me in with Crayolas,
but you went over the line,
let me bleed
into undisclosed territory."

And the doppelganger, and...well, all of it really!

Helen said...

... 'so good at sketching other's lives' ~~~ my favorite line and packs quite a punch!!!

Brian Miller said...

nice...i love crayons...smiles...its nice how those that are lovers and friends can def give form to our lives as well...

dori said...

Mind = blown. Love this one more than anything!

-D

Lyn said...

Hi Other Mary-
More than kind..thanks so much!

Lyn said...

Hi Helen-
Thanks! Let's keep punching!!

Lyn said...

Hi Brian-
Form to our lives, indeed! Thank you...

Lyn said...

Hi dori-
Wow! Really flattered! Thank you!

~T~ said...

Does this go with the header, too? A well-defined doppelganger...

LinkWithin

Related Posts Widget for Blogs by LinkWithin